Monday 30 May 2016

WALT use detail to make my story interesting

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The Wonder Tree
By:Brooklyn
The Wonder Tree
I have a wonder tree.it actually is a secret location.
It will look like a base it will have a gun and a telescope with a door.
Oneday a gang came along and tried to get in but they could not get in.
Then we came along and we scared them away.
In writing i am learning to use detail to make my story interesting.
I feel proud because i am a fast writer.
I need to improve on getting better at proofreading.


1 comment:

Unknown said...

You have worked really hard to add more detail to your work, well done. Mrs Robertson and Mrs Platt.